Mind-Reading Required

A three-paragraph message on a social media read as follows:

“August 20 marks my 14th anniversary with (she named the company).

August 20 also marks my last day at (the same company).

Bittersweet.”

This is dreadful writing. The first sentence exudes pride and pleasure. The rest leaves us hanging unpleasantly. Was she fired? Does she harbor bad feelings about her former employer. Is she leaving for a better opportunity?

Without more detail, the message casts her in an unfavorable light. As an employee, she seems like a trouble-maker. As a boss, she seems inclined to keep employees in the dark.

The message requires readers to read the author’s mind extensively. Good writing requires no mind reading.

She’s probably a fine woman and simply needs the help of a writing counselor. Gosh, I wonder who that might be . . .

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